Open season on interpretations: "Sparrowsong"

     O my love
        if only you
could listen--hear--
             remember

    Days ago
the silence O
          you wishing back
  September

            Nights have gone
and taken dreams
               the frozen winter
    morning

           Shadows' own,
                         my summer child
now lost in days
          a-borning

The time was once
              and now is gone
      my love, my days of
                   glory

When winter's chill
          kept you beside
     to hear the fabled
                    story

And O my love
           my child if you
would listen--and 
              remember

    The days ago
  when comfort O
              was nestled in
December
           NsB 25-11-02

...Felt done right there, but as I read it, I'm not sure. Is it finished, or does it need something more?